I am lost in a cloudy dusk
With desperate rainy eyes
I am harsh and heartless
With chaos over my crown
I am striving for that serenity
With freezing blood in my heart
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Akhila is a self-motivated life-long learner and a self-published author..
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June 27, 2017 at 6:47 pm
Really? Another poem, Akhi! Adipoli, appol poet okkey varatte.
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June 28, 2017 at 2:06 pm
ππ..aa “really” yude answer entha ippo parayua?π€π
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June 25, 2017 at 3:54 pm
Beautifully written.
Akhila ma’am you never fail to amaze me with your amazing writeups.
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June 28, 2017 at 2:07 pm
Thank you so much akansha
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June 23, 2017 at 7:24 pm
Nicely penned… I can relate with the feelings you express here π Sigh …
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June 28, 2017 at 2:09 pm
Thank you so much…nice to know that you can relate to that
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June 21, 2017 at 10:29 pm
Emotions r expressed beautifully
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June 22, 2017 at 9:26 am
Thanks greesh
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June 21, 2017 at 6:52 am
Beautiful….’desperate rainy eyes’ loved that line…
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June 21, 2017 at 2:32 pm
Thanks a lot maniparna
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June 20, 2017 at 11:40 pm
Hey!! Akhilaπ
Beautiful & deep, love reading these words from your penππ
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June 22, 2017 at 9:33 am
Thanks lot prashant
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June 20, 2017 at 9:27 pm
Striving for serenity the heartfelt emotions of yours in the form of poetry.. Lovely..
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June 20, 2017 at 9:28 pm
Thanks neha…but I Donno whether it’s heartfelt or not as I was trying to write something else and ended up in these few words..maybe my pen cheated meπ
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June 20, 2017 at 9:32 pm
Well your notion has turned out to be a remarkable poetry today..If this is how your pen has cheated you I would like it to cheat you again and over againππ
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June 20, 2017 at 9:44 pm
Lol…π
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June 20, 2017 at 8:05 pm
Pain emanates from this like breath from the lungs. Beautiful
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June 20, 2017 at 9:29 pm
Thanks pradita..you read it perfectly…
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June 20, 2017 at 10:04 pm
You’re welcome π
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June 20, 2017 at 7:06 pm
Beautifully expressed.
I guess it is a dark place to be in.
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June 20, 2017 at 9:27 pm
Thanks dear
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June 20, 2017 at 5:10 pm
cool …from a long time friend with new blog π
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June 20, 2017 at 9:26 pm
Thanks.. but who is this long time friendππ€
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June 20, 2017 at 9:33 pm
Entha malayala penkuttiye
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June 20, 2017 at 9:47 pm
Actually you made me think of some real travels…manassinte yatra ayirunnu alle..
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June 20, 2017 at 9:59 pm
Haha..Now u might have got how bad my malayalam was..Enaku puriyale
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June 20, 2017 at 10:08 pm
How the comment which I added on someone else blog, appeared in my blog itself..is it the weirdness of wordpress or my carelessness..
and I am not understanding what you could read from that … strange…
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June 20, 2017 at 10:09 pm
Huh..Oh really?Which comment
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June 20, 2017 at 2:48 pm
An excellent poem! It’s impressive that you are able to express deeply in just few lines.
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June 20, 2017 at 9:23 pm
Thanks a lot..sometimes expressing too much won’t serve the purpose..isn’t it
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June 20, 2017 at 10:24 pm
My pleasure. Yes, expressing crisply is an art. This art is beautiful. Otherwise, it appears to be stretching a writing unnecessarily, which makes it boring and irrelevant. π
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June 20, 2017 at 2:27 pm
Wow! π
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June 20, 2017 at 9:22 pm
Thanks shreπ
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June 20, 2017 at 12:44 pm
Nice, vpiram.com
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June 20, 2017 at 9:22 pm
Thank you
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June 20, 2017 at 12:28 pm
Lovely writing Akhila. I am relating my state of mind to this. At times it becomes the way you have portrayed. ππΌππΌ
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June 20, 2017 at 9:22 pm
Thanks meena…mind is so confusing, no..it goes wherever it wants
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June 21, 2017 at 12:19 pm
Yeah true. Sometimes it doesn’t listen to us.
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June 20, 2017 at 12:09 pm
Awesome piece of writing!
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June 20, 2017 at 9:21 pm
Thanks vandanaπ
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June 20, 2017 at 10:08 am
Striving for the serenity
With freezin blood in heart.
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June 20, 2017 at 10:16 am
Frozen blood may take you to a state of saturation…kozhappayo..πππ
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June 20, 2017 at 10:24 am
Kuzhappam onnum ayeela. But korchude metaphoric aayirnenkil nalle aayinene.
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June 20, 2017 at 10:27 am
Hmm… yes, I agree to that…actually I never intended to write on serenity, was writing something else on those rainy eyes…but even I Donno how it ended up in that wayπ
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June 20, 2017 at 10:42 am
Yeahh i know. Sometymes things just hPpen for no reason.
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June 20, 2017 at 12:00 pm
Athanu..
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June 20, 2017 at 12:11 pm
Hehee. Onnum chyan pattillaaπ
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June 20, 2017 at 10:29 am
I really appreciate you being critic in a nice wayππ
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June 20, 2017 at 10:43 am
A wise man once told me, if yu want to better yuaself learn to take criticism.ππ
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June 20, 2017 at 12:04 pm
Exactly….hats off to that wise man… but you know, very rarely you can have such an opportunity in this virtual world…
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June 20, 2017 at 12:12 pm
True. Thats why i do my part and try to make it happen.
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June 20, 2017 at 9:42 am
Excellent work, Akhila π I especially love the line – With desperate rainy eyes. Keep up the good work!
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June 20, 2017 at 10:18 am
Thanks a lot deepika for your kind words…. yeah, those rainy eyes speak volumes
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June 20, 2017 at 1:08 pm
You’re most welcome, Akhila π
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June 20, 2017 at 9:25 am
BAt present I personally feel this poem fits to my mental condition so much….luv it Akhilaπ
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June 20, 2017 at 10:24 am
Thank you…happy that you could relate to that…hope you reach that state of serenity soon
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June 20, 2017 at 10:28 am
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June 20, 2017 at 9:14 am
Truly magnificent the way you skillfully used words to portray the intensity of emotions was really impressive, thanks for sharing such a lovely post. According to your convenience please do read some of my writings would love to know what you think about them π
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June 20, 2017 at 10:28 am
Thanks sidharth for your inspirational words.. will check your posts soon
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June 20, 2017 at 12:17 pm
Thanks for respecting my invitation, please feel free to explore any of my poems looking forward to hearing from regarding what you think about my writings π
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June 20, 2017 at 9:02 am
Beautiful, Akhila. β€π
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June 20, 2017 at 10:28 am
Thanks sumit…π
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