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Serenity

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Serenity

I am lost in a cloudy dusk

With desperate rainy eyes

I am harsh and heartless

With chaos over my crown

I am striving for that serenity

With freezing blood in my heart

64 responses to “Serenity”

  1. Manoj Mehra Avatar
    Manoj Mehra

    Beautiful.

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    1. Akhila Avatar
      Akhila

      Thank you

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  2. thewritewomanblog Avatar
    thewritewomanblog

    Really? Another poem, Akhi! Adipoli, appol poet okkey varatte.

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    1. Akhila Avatar
      Akhila

      😍😊..aa “really” yude answer entha ippo parayua?🤔😂

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  3. akansha1602 Avatar
    akansha1602

    Beautifully written.
    Akhila ma’am you never fail to amaze me with your amazing writeups.

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    1. Akhila Avatar
      Akhila

      Thank you so much akansha

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  4. Aquileana Avatar
    Aquileana

    Nicely penned… I can relate with the feelings you express here 😉 Sigh …

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    1. Akhila Avatar
      Akhila

      Thank you so much…nice to know that you can relate to that

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  5. crystalamayy Avatar
    crystalamayy

    Emotions r expressed beautifully

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    1. Akhila Avatar
      Akhila

      Thanks greesh

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  6. Maniparna Sengupta Majumder Avatar
    Maniparna Sengupta Majumder

    Beautiful….’desperate rainy eyes’ loved that line…

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    1. Akhila Avatar
      Akhila

      Thanks a lot maniparna

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  7. prashantt Avatar
    prashantt

    Hey!! Akhila🙋
    Beautiful & deep, love reading these words from your pen👌📝

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    1. Akhila Avatar
      Akhila

      Thanks lot prashant

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  8. mywords331 Avatar
    mywords331

    Striving for serenity the heartfelt emotions of yours in the form of poetry.. Lovely..

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    1. Akhila Avatar
      Akhila

      Thanks neha…but I Donno whether it’s heartfelt or not as I was trying to write something else and ended up in these few words..maybe my pen cheated me😂

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      1. mywords331 Avatar
        mywords331

        Well your notion has turned out to be a remarkable poetry today..If this is how your pen has cheated you I would like it to cheat you again and over again😃😃

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        1. Akhila Avatar
          Akhila

          Lol…😂

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  9. Pradita Kapahi Avatar
    Pradita Kapahi

    Pain emanates from this like breath from the lungs. Beautiful

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    1. Akhila Avatar
      Akhila

      Thanks pradita..you read it perfectly…

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      1. Pradita Kapahi Avatar
        Pradita Kapahi

        You’re welcome 😊

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  10. Moushmi Radhanpara Avatar
    Moushmi Radhanpara

    Beautifully expressed.
    I guess it is a dark place to be in.

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    1. Akhila Avatar
      Akhila

      Thanks dear

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  11. apassersby Avatar
    apassersby

    cool …from a long time friend with new blog 🙂

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    1. Akhila Avatar
      Akhila

      Thanks.. but who is this long time friend😇🤔

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      1. apassersby Avatar
        apassersby

        Entha malayala penkuttiye

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    2. Akhila Avatar
      Akhila

      Actually you made me think of some real travels…manassinte yatra ayirunnu alle..

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      1. apassersby Avatar
        apassersby

        Haha..Now u might have got how bad my malayalam was..Enaku puriyale

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        1. Akhila Avatar
          Akhila

          How the comment which I added on someone else blog, appeared in my blog itself..is it the weirdness of wordpress or my carelessness..
          and I am not understanding what you could read from that … strange…

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          1. apassersby Avatar
            apassersby

            Huh..Oh really?Which comment

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  12. Akash Singh Avatar
    Akash Singh

    An excellent poem! It’s impressive that you are able to express deeply in just few lines.

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    1. Akhila Avatar
      Akhila

      Thanks a lot..sometimes expressing too much won’t serve the purpose..isn’t it

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      1. Akash Singh Avatar
        Akash Singh

        My pleasure. Yes, expressing crisply is an art. This art is beautiful. Otherwise, it appears to be stretching a writing unnecessarily, which makes it boring and irrelevant. 😊

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  13. Shreya Sharma Avatar
    Shreya Sharma

    Wow! 😍

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    1. Akhila Avatar
      Akhila

      Thanks shre😍

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  14. VPiram Avatar
    VPiram

    Nice, vpiram.com

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    1. Akhila Avatar
      Akhila

      Thank you

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  15. tingleurtastebuds Avatar
    tingleurtastebuds

    Lovely writing Akhila. I am relating my state of mind to this. At times it becomes the way you have portrayed. 👍🏼👌🏼

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    1. Akhila Avatar
      Akhila

      Thanks meena…mind is so confusing, no..it goes wherever it wants

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      1. tingleurtastebuds Avatar
        tingleurtastebuds

        Yeah true. Sometimes it doesn’t listen to us.

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  16. Feelings and Freedom Avatar
    Feelings and Freedom

    Awesome piece of writing!

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    1. Akhila Avatar
      Akhila

      Thanks vandana😊

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  17. Amal Suresh Avatar
    Amal Suresh

    Striving for the serenity
    With freezin blood in heart.
    😊😇😘

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    1. Akhila Avatar
      Akhila

      Frozen blood may take you to a state of saturation…kozhappayo..😇😂😂

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      1. Amal Suresh Avatar
        Amal Suresh

        Kuzhappam onnum ayeela. But korchude metaphoric aayirnenkil nalle aayinene.

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        1. Akhila Avatar
          Akhila

          Hmm… yes, I agree to that…actually I never intended to write on serenity, was writing something else on those rainy eyes…but even I Donno how it ended up in that way😂

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          1. Amal Suresh Avatar
            Amal Suresh

            Yeahh i know. Sometymes things just hPpen for no reason.

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            1. Akhila Avatar
              Akhila

              Athanu..
              😇

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              1. Amal Suresh Avatar
                Amal Suresh

                Hehee. Onnum chyan pattillaa😅

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        2. Akhila Avatar
          Akhila

          I really appreciate you being critic in a nice way👏😊

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          1. Amal Suresh Avatar
            Amal Suresh

            A wise man once told me, if yu want to better yuaself learn to take criticism.😇😇

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            1. Akhila Avatar
              Akhila

              Exactly….hats off to that wise man… but you know, very rarely you can have such an opportunity in this virtual world…

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              1. Amal Suresh Avatar
                Amal Suresh

                True. Thats why i do my part and try to make it happen.

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  18. Deepika Kumaaraguru Avatar
    Deepika Kumaaraguru

    Excellent work, Akhila 🙂 I especially love the line – With desperate rainy eyes. Keep up the good work!

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    1. Akhila Avatar
      Akhila

      Thanks a lot deepika for your kind words…. yeah, those rainy eyes speak volumes

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      1. Deepika Kumaaraguru Avatar
        Deepika Kumaaraguru

        You’re most welcome, Akhila 🙂

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  19. blindloveweb Avatar
    blindloveweb

    BAt present I personally feel this poem fits to my mental condition so much….luv it Akhila😁

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    1. Akhila Avatar
      Akhila

      Thank you…happy that you could relate to that…hope you reach that state of serenity soon

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      1. blindloveweb Avatar
        blindloveweb

        😘

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  20. Sidharth Avatar
    Sidharth

    Truly magnificent the way you skillfully used words to portray the intensity of emotions was really impressive, thanks for sharing such a lovely post. According to your convenience please do read some of my writings would love to know what you think about them 😊

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    1. Akhila Avatar
      Akhila

      Thanks sidharth for your inspirational words.. will check your posts soon

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      1. Sidharth Avatar
        Sidharth

        Thanks for respecting my invitation, please feel free to explore any of my poems looking forward to hearing from regarding what you think about my writings 😊

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  21. SumitOfficial Avatar
    SumitOfficial

    Beautiful, Akhila. ❤🙈

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    1. Akhila Avatar
      Akhila

      Thanks sumit…😊

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